Great reading, Fiona. Your tone is very familiar now, but I wonder if you could vary it a little, play with other tones, other registers. Just a thought. ; )
Heh I am not sure to be honest - I think likely the next thing for interests sake is going to be adding enriched background. This is still not working out that well for me as the sound loops don't seem to actually loop.
We'll see how we go, but in the interim I think altering my actual vice would just be sorta silly - like girl on helium, or girl with mouse vice ;)
By tone I meant your very serious tone of voice, not the actual sound of your voice, but the intent in your voice--do you see what I mean? I thought you could vary your tone so that it's maybe sometimes sarcastic, sometimes whimsical, sometimes funny, sometimes lighthearted...
Yes, I didn't mean necessarily with this poem, but in future poems, it might be interesting to experiment with different tones, different voices, so that you can acquire some more range. I Know this is difficult; I struggle with it myself.
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Heh I am not sure to be honest - I think likely the next thing for interests sake is going to be adding enriched background. This is still not working out that well for me as the sound loops don't seem to actually loop.
We'll see how we go, but in the interim I think altering my actual vice would just be sorta silly - like girl on helium, or girl with mouse vice ;)
I think I need a different sort of poem ;)
I am tring something new with this -- I'll post in a moment :)